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               a materialist
               inside of you

               unknitting your sweater
               & in your dream

               you are a wolf eating
               a flower in an orange field. the world
               is ending. an unnamed girl stains you

               as if she were tea
               giving up to a
               foaming ocean.

               she writes a story: the unrequited
               blurry visions of two visionaries
               separated by antibiotic resistance.

               I'm sorry we have nothing left
               to say to one another tonight

               & for our past together
               having a lace quality to it.
               we drink from a jar as
               big as the republic;

               we disagree, yet we
               carry on with it.
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Kelcobi Featured By Owner Edited Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful! Your imagery is dream-like, ripe and inspiring. I may try to paint this.

{ I happened across this in Issue 01 of The Daily Bread Cafe / #TDBC }
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beleave Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014
your enjambment is always spot-on. also as always, your non-linear thought and feeling draws me further in. 
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caiyo474 Featured By Owner May 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
perfection
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Personghost Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student Writer
Holy crap this is beautiful and intelligent I loved it Hug 
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know that I've featured this piece in my end-of-the-year journal feature :)
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
those first four stanzas are exquisitely heartbreaking.

you have talent.
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back-bones Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Student Writer
ahhh this is so original and just overall very lovely. thank you for writing this.
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Student Writer
the last two lines
:heart:
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ExistenceWeSummonYou Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
"Symptoms of red" is such an intriguing title - like the sensation of a color is a disease you might have.

And this materialist inside of me sounds like a jerk. Is it Richard Dawkins? I bet it's Richard Dawkins, he's such a jerk. I needed that sweater to stay warm in this cold and uncaring world.

ANTWAY this an interesting, interesting poem.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your lovely work was featured here untamedunwanted.deviantart.com…!
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